I am a night person

Well it would seem i do all my writing at night, i think maybe it gives me inspiration. every part of my story has been written and night, well not really night more like from 7 onward. last night i was writing until 11, i didn't even realize the time! it all seems crazy that right now i am liking writing when i spent all my school years hating English, i'm not even gonna take it for an a level.

Once again any comments on my work for my book welcome good and bad please read the other posts and let me know what you think.

A Possible Dream

That night Zoë was visited by the dreams that had haunted her childhood. The room was perfectly round and painted a deep blood red. A door to her right creaked open and a man walked in, she turned around to great him. “Princess, your parents asked me to come, you understand what I am here to do?” he asked , she nodded. The man came closer, he was much taller than she was, about as tall as her dad. He took hold of her head in his hands, her hair engulfing them, and he started to whisper, “Your parents are sending you away to safety, after tonight you will not remember this night or any other night before, 11 years from now when you are 16 someone will come to you and bring you home.” he paused and looked deep into her eyes, “Your name is Zoë Crombie, your parents are Hannah and Luke Crombie, your grandparents died before you were born, you grew up in Alaska but moved to England when you were 4.” she released her and she fell forwards into his arms.

more description needed? any comments welcome :D

A Good Speech? For a Bit of Drama?

“I struggled and it made the whole ordeal a lot more painful, eventually I managed to pull him off, there was blood dripping down his lips, I shoved him to the ground but he got up before I’d even had a chance to turn around. He was there in front of me once again but this time I noticed my TV aerial had fallen of the roof and a metal pole was lying by my feet so I picked it up and smacked him round the head with it, then I ran for the back door and locked it behind me. Then when I looked into the garden he as gone, no where to be seen.” she finished slowly.

One of the characters is attacked. this is her explaining the ordeal to the main character Zoe. does it need more drama?

Blurb?

Would you consider reading this if this was the blurb?




Zoë Crombie is about to embark on a gripping adventure. She has just discovered her true identity, she is not the normal 16 year old she thought she was, she is really a princess of darkness. Sent to safety by her true parents to save her from an evil that threatens exposing her people to humans.

Vampires live all around us without us knowing about it. Their “royal family” sent their only daughter to safety so that she couldn’t be killed by the evil that could cause them not only to be exposed to humans but also to kill the royals and take their place. Join Zoë on her adventure to save and meet her real parents as she accepts her true identity, but someone wants to stop her, will she survive?

First Couple Of Lines From Chapter One

CRACK!
Zoë’s eyes snapped open. “What was that?” She thought as she peered around her bedroom curtains and stared into the darkness. The street lamps illuminated the tree outside her bedroom window so it glowed eerily in the night. A thick mossy branch the size of her arm was hanging by an inch of bark and swinging gently from side to side as if someone had been sitting there only moments before.


Would you start reading a book that began with this? Any opinions and comments welcome. The book is most likely going to be aimed at teenagers but adults could read it too if they wanted to.